Showing posts with label Alabama. Show all posts
Showing posts with label Alabama. Show all posts

Sunday, October 8, 2017

FICTION WRITERS- Getting help with a foreign character's DIALOGUE "De nada"




RABBIT FANS remember the Australian character, Rakum Cow Stuart Loudon, from Rabbit Legacy. He runs into Canaan at a Rest Area one night when Canaan needs a "buzz." In the upcoming third installment (Rabbit Redemption, Little Roni Publishers Jan 2018), he has a much larger role. Because of this, I needed help with his dialogue. I'm not Australian so my scope of Aussie dialect and language comes from Hollywood. 

HERE'S MY SOLUTION. The following is a helpful blog on what to do when your character isn't you!

DIALOGUE HELP: So what if your character is Australian and you're not? When I write fiction, my characters come as they are--I don't choose them, they arrive already formed. That means they aren't all White, Female, American, Christian, Southern Belles (touché). Thanks to social media, nearly every writer has friends around the country who they can ask for help to make sure their character sounds real and not "Hollywood."

Recently, I asked my friend and fellow author Stu Loudon for help bringing my Aussie character's dialogue to life. I know all about my character's personality, but not how he might say certain things. I asked Stu to help and he said YES.

IF YOU GET HELP, go through your novel and select portions where you need the friend to help out. Don't send the whole novel, or even the entire chapter--this will greatly slow down the response time. Send only what the friend needs above and beyond the dialogue to add his or her special native touch. Then, you should highlight the dialogue so your friend can go right to it easily. Keep in mind, no matter how much a friend or fan likes your work, he or she is busy 24/7 just like you are! Lastly, offer to pay them enough for a nice dinner. Trust me, there are a dozen good reasons to give a little monetary thank you for this help.

USING THE INTERNET: Sometimes you have to use the internet for this help. I googled "Aussie slang" in case my friend was too busy to help and dozens of sites came up. Of course, I would have bungled the job -- Americans wouldn't notice, but anyone who ever knew a true Australian would know I used the internet to make my character speak!

FINAL NOTE ABOUT GOOGLE TRANSLATE: Sometimes, your character speaks another language, or uses foreign phrases in his daily speech. For example, I have several Latino characters who may exclaim*, "Madre de dios!" or "Meirda!", or my German character may say, "jah," etc. etc. We all use Google Translate to make short sentences for our books. That is my advice--use it only for short items. It is not perfect, and if you know anyone who speaks that language, ask them to check it.

RABBIT TRILOGY
Author Beth Rider writes a vampire novel that angers a race of "real" vampires living under the radar since before Christ. Learn more at www.ellencmaze.com.

*Use proper punctuation, too. This blog doesn't support upside-down exclamation points. :)


Friday, September 22, 2017

GLOVES ~ a lusty short (But not in the way you wish) "Pleeeeeeeease, Billy, pleeeeeease...."

Himself grotesquely disfigured in a car wreck, the visitor was easily the most beautiful woman eighteen-year-old Billy had ever seen, and before the story ends, he will get her to touch him, no matter the cost.

TOUCH... We all take it for granted, but this one-night visitor to Billy's aunt's B&B covers her skin to prevent it. Covered from head to ankle in skin-hugging lace, it was difficult to imagine the meaning behind her every strange move and the odd behavior of her male companion. It wasn't long before Billy began his investigation and discovered he wanted her to touch him in the worst possibly way. Even if it turned out, she might not even be human.

“Billy, pleeeease….” she cooed, her eyes sorrowful, her glistening lips begging me to surrender. “It hurts me not to touch. It hurts me.”



GLOVES by Ellen C. Maze, 99 cents on Kindle

EXCERPT:

About the time I got to my own story, Edna’s voice trickled up announcing dinner; I was supposed to help serve. I stood and Roxanne followed suit.
“Wait,” she said and took a step closer. “Wait…” she whispered the second time and lifted leather-wrapped fingers to my eye-level. Oh, I wished those fingers would touch me. “Wait, just a moment, please…” whispering again, and begging, as I’d heard through the wall earlier. My follicles reacted to the sensation of her touch as she moved the curls aside and then stroked, once, twice, three times, without ever touching my scalp. What and why didn’t matter, only that she didn’t stop. Then an insane phrase came out of my mouth.
“You can touch me, Roxanne. It’s okay.” I stood only inches away and when the words left my mouth, a look crossed her face that I’d never before seen. Was it exhilaration? Joy? Perverse fear? I think it was all three.
Roxanne withdrew her fingers and right under my nose, I watched her slowly, no—provocatively—slip the glove from her hand. Oh, yes, she was about to touch me. I made an effort to bend my knees so I wouldn’t pass out.
      “Billy, where should I touch you?”
       Choices? What did it matter where? Just do it! My tongue stuck to the roof of my mouth and I wished I had telepathy.
       Her manicured pale fingers moved toward my hairline and an electric buzz coursed to my head as if attracted by her touch. She moaned the instant her fingers made contact, and I fell in love with her mouth.
      Then I lost consciousness.

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Thursday, September 21, 2017

EMMA'S DRAGON ~ If only she'd paid more attention... LOVE BITES, LOVE BURNS


Written in a jolly, tongue-in-cheek style, dark humor horror short story, EMMA'S DRAGON: A FAIRLY HORRIBLE LOVE STORY recounts how Emma Topp saw a dragon, reported it to the police, and fell in lust. If she'd had more time, it might have blossomed into more, but alas, life--as in love-- often takes its own route to fulfillment.

SYNOPSIS: Famous children's book illustrator, Emma Topp, saw a dragon while camping alone at Tom Bailey Lake. Should she tell anyone? Braving to share her sighting with handsome and dashing Deputy Trevor Lucas, Emma might have bitten off more than she can chew.

REVIEWERS: Love it or hate it. The author calls it "a fairly horrible love story" because of the dark twist at the end. If you want fluffy romance, this snarky tale won't satisfy. But if you like your horror with a giggle and a sexy deputy thrown in for good measure, this will make your lunch hour a hoot.

LOCATION: Emma sees her dragon in Birmingham, Alabama.

EXCERPT:

When she reached her favorite spot, her watch read 5:30, still three hours until dusk. Emma worked her pack loose and dropped it to the leafy ground. A flash of movement in her peripheral vision caught her attention and she peered into the thick brush to discern what moved. After five seconds, branches swayed as if something had passed through, and she still hadn’t heard anything. Not yet alarmed, Emma called in the direction of the movement, “Hey there!”

Immediately, an Auburn Tigers baseball cap popped into her vision above the lower branches, followed by a wisp of brown hair, and a pair of luminescent green eyes.

Luminescent? Emma ignored her creative mind and waved at the deputy, not even wondering at his being there.

“Miss Topp,” he laughed, stepping into full view, “come to try your luck again?”

“You come to see if I was yankin’ yer chain?” she replied, putting on a severe southern drawl.

Deputy Lucas chuckled and shook his head. “You caught me.”

Dressed in relaxed jeans, decidedly-worn hiking boots, and a light windbreaker over a plain red T-shirt, the deputy appeared much less official, but no less delicious. Emma winced at her train of thought and he smiled as if he’d read her thoughts.

“So this is the spot, huh?” he asked, dropping his pack near hers and planting his feet to take in the area.

Emma followed his gaze as it circled around. Besides the tops of chest-high brush, in front of full-grown birch and oak trees, a roller coaster-shaped mountain range filled the far horizon. Lovely, quiet, secluded—great place for a dragon to hang...

Check it out on Amazon Kindle ( 99 cents), and leave a review if it moves you! ~ Ellen
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Sunday, July 23, 2017

Read the Prologue, Vampire Series Re-Release from Little Roni Publishers, Post #1

Sit back, turn on a light, and read the prologue from Rabbit: Chasing Beth Rider, by Ellen C Maze.
PG-13, Violence

Have fun down the rabbit hole! ~ Ellen













Rabbit: Chasing BethRider By Ellen C. Maze ©2017 Excerpt from the KINDLE EDITION

Prologue


The monster had him boxed in, and it wasn’t even close to sunup.
“Rabbit! Give it up! You don’t have a chance!”
Schaffer cringed at the sentiment and tiptoed faster along the corrugated tin wall. Up ahead, he could see the exit, a huge door that emptied into the dark night beyond. The warehouse sat on the river’s edge—how far from the pier was he? Maybe fifty feet once he cleared the threshold. There was a good chance he could jump into the water and swim away. Didn’t these aberrations of nature abhor running water, or had that been an evil joke? He had been in their clutches long enough to question his sanity at every turn. Schaffer didn’t have time to ponder. Taking one deep breath to gather his nerve, he burst forward suddenly, commanding his legs to propel him faster than they ever had before. However, it wasn’t fast enough. Not by a mile. Schaffer slammed into the outstretched arm of his enemy after four short strides.
“Oops,” the monster giggled. “Down you go.”
Schaffer struggled to find his feet, but the creature grabbed him by the collar and dragged him back the way they had come. His boot heels plowed the red clay in the dirt parking lot, making furrows no one would notice.
“Silly wabbit. Come on, we have a big night ahead of us.”
Schaffer wrestled against his attacker’s grip to no avail. The creature that held him fast was not his master, but he was still one of them. One of the Brethren. A Rakum. A devilish miscreant with ancient roots no one remembered, whose strength was outdone only by his cruelty. They would be sure to punish Schaffer for the stunt he pulled against their Elder, Rufus.
Schaffer fought futilely until they reached the monster’s aged Dodge pickup parked in the unlit abandoned lot. He got a glimpse of the Rakum’s face; it was not one he recognized, but that mattered little. Once marked as a Rabbit, they would come from all over.
“In ya go, Rabbit.”
The Rakum grabbed Schaffer’s belt along with his collar and tossed him into the passenger seat in one fluid motion. Schaffer grunted with discomfort as his attacker zip-tied his hands together. He then zip-tied his wrists to the headrest behind, yanking his arms up above his head. Schaffer cried out, but only a few syllables escaped his lips before the monster shoved a greasy rag into his mouth.
“Where’re your matches now, Rabbit?”
Schaffer shivered at the Rakum’s question; he had set Rufus on fire. It had been a glorious sight, but he didn’t get away fast enough. Schaffer blinked back tears, gagged, and watched with round eyes as his attacker settled into the driver’s seat and turned the ignition.
“Might be fun to burn you up, Rabbit. See what that smells like.”
Schaffer moaned. An hour after he set Rufus aflame, he’d been captured and marked by one of the Elders. The creature told him to start running.
Schaffer looked out the window as they sped through a thick forest. If only he’d planned an escape route. Now this monster was taking him to his private killing field. As the morbid thought crossed his mind, an Airstream trailer emerged from the woods ahead.
“Oh, my. All for me.”
The Rakum hit the brakes hard and didn’t bother to come around to extricate his catch. Instead, he jumped down and reached in to yank Schaffer out the driver’s side. The stiff plastic ties raked across his flesh and he yelped through the filthy towel as his skin gave way. His wrist bones fractured as his hands popped free of the bonds. The Rakum chuckled and tossed Schaffer bleeding and crying over his shoulder and headed for the trailer.
Schaffer watched the weeds go by in the moonlight, his bloodied fingers dangling off and on in his line of vision. They no longer stung, but he was too terrified to notice. They entered the trailer, the door closed and was locked, and he was dropped onto a tattered yellow couch. Schaffer grimaced as he hit the sofa hard, but one glance at his wrist and he could see the skin was not ripped as he had thought. Was it the dim light?
“Now you’re in my house, Rabbit. Nowhere to run. Nowhere to hide. Do you know what happens to Rabbits around here?”
Schaffer’s eyes grew wide and he shook his head. His tongue pushed at the rag in his mouth, but it wouldn’t budge. He watched his attacker’s face and vainly pleaded with his eyes.
“We eat Rabbits around here. Yep. But we take our time.”
Schaffer cringed as the monster approached and stopped only inches from his sweating face.
“And Rufus wants to be sure you suffer.”
Rufus? In the present tense? Are they fireproof? Schaffer choked back a scream as the monster withdrew a knife from outside his vision and brought it up to his chin.
“We ain’t in no hurry, Rabbit. We can go all night…” The sharp blade pressed into Schaffer’s throat until it broke through the skin with stinging pain. Blood coursed from the wound and spilled out from before him onto the monster’s chest. But as his assailant hovered over him, an evil grin on his dark face, Schaffer felt something else entirely. The fiery pain in his neck subsided and was replaced with a peculiar tightness. The blood that spurted forcefully from his body ebbed and then stopped completely. His knife wound had healed. –As if he was one of them.
The marking procedure did this! Horrified as the gravity of his situation sunk in, Schaffer violently leapt aside. The Rakum backhanded him into place and straddled him on the couch, holding him down with his body weight.
“See, Rabbit? Now you get it.” Schaffer straightened up in his bonds as the monster raised the knife and slashed him again, this time across the chest. The wound was deep and the dark oxygenated blood oozed down his shirtfront. Once again, the pain subsided and the flow eased. Schaffer’s face twisted into a mask of horror.
“Yep. That’s right. We’ll go on all night. And tomorrow night. And the night after that...” 
Schaffer watched as his attacker brought the bloody knife tip to his mouth and cleaned it with his red tongue.
“Oh, shit, that...is...so...” he whispered, closed his eyes and smiled. After a moment, he sought Schaffer’s terrified eye. “And Rabbit,” he said and paused drunkenly. “When I get tired of you…we’ll have my brothers over and let them see what fun you are.”
The knife rose again and plunged into Schaffer’s middle. He grunted, his gag still preventing him from screaming no matter how his lungs fought in his chest to expel his terror. The Rakum’s gory tongue circled his lips, not coming close to clearing the expelled blood from his chin.
“We’ll never get tired of you,” he whispered, obviously intoxicated by the ingestion of Schaffer’s blood. The knife came out and was thrust in again, this time into his side, into his ribs. “And you’ll never die. You’ll never die, Rabbit. Never.”
As Schaffer felt the skin tighten and knit itself together in his middle, he knew the monster was right. His punishment would go on.  Schaffer was in hell. And his hell would last forever.
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Rabbit: Chasing Beth Rider
Book One of the Rabbit Trilogy


(Be sure to purchase the Little Roni Publishers Version—ISBN: 978-0615678306, Kindle and PB, for the Newest Edition with BONUS “Easter Egg” Chapters)

BACK COVER: What if your novel attracts the wrong kind of attention?

Author Beth Rider's vampire novel has hit number one, but her fictitious plot puts her in the crosshairs of an ancient race of vampiric beings known as the Rakum. Spreading evil among mankind for thousands of years, the leadership of this bloodthirsty race now has a singular focus: catch Beth Rider—her very life in mortal jeopardy as she goes on the run, a rabbit desperate to escape the worst of predators.

Facing the most terrifying trial of her life against creatures known only in fables, one simple woman will unintentionally threaten the very existence of a powerful and accursed people. In the climactic mêlée, it is a race to the death—or if Beth has her way, a race to the life—of every Rakum who makes the choice.

Rabbit: Chasing Beth Rider By Ellen C. Maze ©2017
Excerpt from the KINDLE EDITION
All rights reserved. This book or parts thereof may not be reproduced in any form, stored in a retrieval system, or transmitted in any form by any means without prior written permission of the authors, except as provided by United States of America copyright law. The following is a work of fiction. Names, characters, places, and incidents are fictitious or used fictitiously. Any resemblance to real persons, living or dead, to factual events or to businesses is coincidental and unintentional.
Print Edition ISBN-13: 978-0615678306
Also available LARGE PRINT format
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This prologue provided to prepare the fans of the Rabbit Trilogy for the release of Book Three, Rabbit Redemption. Blogger/Book Reviewers, Contact the author at ellenmaze@aol.com for a complimentary copy of the books for your reviews.